Essay Fixation: Below is the feedback please follow instructions as noted!

Essay Fixation: Below is the feedback please follow instructions as noted! I think that there are some interesting ideas here. The thesis is vague and you should not make any announcements in your essay. I do think that the ideas at the end of the essay related to how morals divide our country, is a strong point that could be your thesis. You should consider moving that idea to the intro. In addition, make sure that your body paragraphs are not just a discussion about the history of morality, but highlight how this was served to divide us. Let me know if this helps.N/

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